Looking For Feedback On A New Children's Gospel Tract

re: Looking For Feedback On A New Children's Gospel Tract

Julie Allen — Sat, 17 Mar 2007 02:44:14 GMT

Dear Brother Bob, I couldn't get the slides to move very well and so wasn't able to read the Kid's tract entirely. However, if your audience is children say 2nd grade to 6th well then it seems a little too wordy. I do agree that you have avalid point. May I make a suggestion in the mean time as God leads you in creating a tract? Have you ever seen this Kid's Tract? I use this regularly and find that kids love it and it has a very clear gospel message. It is interactive and colorful and the size is great too. It fits right in little hands. Not only do they hear the Gospel in its entirety, but by the time they go through this little booklet, they will never forget God's Ten Commandments. As a matter of fact, I had been a Christian for 22 years and could not quote the Ten Commandments. But since teaching this tract to my child, I now know them. Often when I see a family I will ask the parent if I may give their child a picture book, they are always warm and often times I am able to give them an adult tract as well, or even have a one 2 one conversation with them about spiritual things. And no one is offended. Here is the tract link. It is produced by Living Waters and you can go here to view it entirely: http://www.livingwaters.com/Merchant2/graphics/tracts/hey_kids/index.html I used this tract to speak to our 6 year old daughter 2 1/2 years ago and she is today serving God and witnessing to her classmates. I Give God All Glory!!! That is how clear the message is. Thank you for listening. If I can serve in any way further, please contact me. All For Him, Julie Allen Local Leader Southern Ohio Seed Sowers gnnwaverly@roadrunner.com

re: Looking For Feedback On A New Children's Gospel Tract

Erin — Wed, 29 Nov 2006 20:39:18 GMT

The layout and graphics are wonderful! However, I agree with Darrell that it could use some readability improvements. I teach first and second grade, so maybe my suggestions will be helpful. I think a gifted second grader would absorb a lot, probably most of it if the child grew up with the KJV. But if you want to reach the average second grader, I think some of the vocabulary and phrasing might confuse the child.

On page 1, I'm not sure that most kids would understand the "first and last" statement. To these kids, they always want to be "first" for everything and "last" is a negative term.

With Psalm 19:1, I would leave off the "firmament" part of the verse because that word means nothing to the average kid.

I would also leave out or replace the word "recognition" on p.2.

On p. 7, "Since there was no way for us to come to God because of our sin" seems like it has a slightly misplaced modifier. It might be rephrased, something like, "Since our sin kept us from coming to God" or "Since there was no way for sinful people to come to God."

I hope these suggestions help.

re: Looking For Feedback On A New Children's Gospel Tract

karen — Sun, 26 Nov 2006 07:59:49 GMT

this is very beautifully done! let us know when they are available for purchase! :)

re: Looking For Feedback On A New Children's Gospel Tract

Darrell Morris — Sat, 25 Nov 2006 20:47:56 GMT

There are a few things I think need consideration. First, the tract would be much more understandable if you used a modern translation or paraphrased. Most kids reading it surely won't be from fundamental churches. Make the most important things for them to understand most accessible for them. On page 2 nix "that" in the first line. Should read "Everything God created". Change "with His work" to "with all His work". Consider changing ""what a great and a good" to "what a great and good," or "what a great and what a good". The former is preferable. On page 4 consider changing "pure" to "without sin". Again, those reading this tract will not necessarily be familiar with our common terms. Consider changing the first "mankind" to "people". Maybe change second "mankind" to "they". Insert "Adam and Eve" after "first people"? Page 5, change "standard" to "rule" or "perfect law"? Page 7, Maybe "suffered" the penalty, as the word "paid" denotes a giving of something in exchange for one's sin as opposed to God's righteous demand against sin being met out. The penalty for sin is not paid but received. Our common terminology is not the best descriptive of the true transaction between God and man. God's wrath and righteous demand was not appeased by an exchange of something of equal value but by being met out. Change "might" to "could"? Page 8, you stuck in "saved" from nowhere. You might explain the term of change it to something more immediately understood. Didn't mean to be overly critical. Just some thoughts.